New Design: Chris in Sony Datacenter

I have not had much time, or desire really, to do a lot of work the last few weeks because of personal family issues. But since I have been evolving into unique designs for each photo, I wanted to do this idea I had from an old photoshoot.

I originally intended to do the green type much larger, but I wanted the look/feel to be like a scrolling LED sign. When I enlarge the type, that impression is virtually lost.
(if you click on the image, it goes to a larger version, which is still 50% smaller than the full resolution)

Here is a variation, working more with the implied grid structure of the photo. I like the concept better, but not sure if I like the execution.